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[Script To Scream]: Awkward Sex, Different Characters, Gargoyles, A Freddy Dog And More In ‘A Nightmare On Elm Street 3: Dream Warriors’!

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Editor’s note: All script images have been removed from this article.

A film lives many lives before it ever hits the screen. A script is usually revised multiple times (sometimes dozens) before a single foot of film is exposed (or the digital equivalent thereof). I’m not just talking about smaller stuff like dialogue polishes and the addition or deletion of scenes. Many times the core story is reworked in profound ways. Sometimes it’s downright shocking how different the final film can be from the initial drafts.

In this new (semi-regular) feature for Bloody-Disgusting, I’m going to take a look at some early drafts of scripts for horror films that you may have already seen and discuss the differences, whether they took a turn for the worse, better or just different. There are also a handful of scripts for sequels and remakes that never happened that are worth checking out – just to see what might have been.

These aren’t script reviews, and only rarely will I be breaking the stories down on a beat-by-beat basis. I’m just going to point out some cool, interesting and/or disastrous choices that happened along the way. Each installment will be different, and each installment will be fun. I’ll also be including sample pages (when available)* so you don’t have to take my word for it!

*This applies only to older and previously released films that are already part of the culture. We’re not in the business of leaking or sabotaging projects in development.

My first installment was a look at Joe Dante’s Gremlins, written by Chris Columbus. Next, I took a crack at Zombieland written by Rhett Reese and Paul Wernick. Today – in the longest installment by far – we’re gonna dive into an early draft of A Nightmare On Elm Street 3: Dream Warriors.

I’m wagering that almost all of you know Chuck Russel’s A Nightmare On Elm Street 3: Dream Warriors like the back of your hand. For those who don’t, it follows the story of a group of troubled, institutionalized teens who, in addition to fighting their own demons while awake, are being terrorized and killed by Freddy in their sleep.

In addition, they all have special powers while in the dream world that allow them to take Krueger on. Kristen (Patricia Arquette) can pull other people into her dreams (as well as perform gymnastics). Kincaid (Ken Sagoes) has super strength. Recovering addict Taryn (Jennifer Rubin) is punk-rock beautiful and “bad” with her switchblades. Wheelchair bound Will (Ira Heiden) can walk and turn into the “wizard master”. Unfortunately, the expert puppeteer Phillip (Bradley Gregg) and aspiring actress Jennifer (Penelope Sudrow) don’t make it long enough to fully realize their powers. And poor mute Joey spends the 3rd act largely (and literally) tongue-tied – though he does pull it together for one big triumphant scream.

Rounding out the cast are Craig Wasson as their caring psychiatrist Neil, Heather Langenkamp reprising her roll as Nancy (who is now a dream expert) and John Saxon as Nancy’s dad John (who has sunk into alcoholism following the events of part 1).

But the script used to be very, very different. It’s widely known that Frank Darabont and Chuck Russell did their own pass on the script as it moved closer to production. I’m not sure which additions are theirs – I know they reordered a few things and took Phillip’s existing sleep-walking death and made it a billion times more awesome by adding the vein-marionette conceit. But the first few drafts were done by Wes Craven and Bruce Wagner. I have one dated late July 1986 that is more or less the film you see today (and by more or less I mean it has quite a bit of differences but most of the major story beats are intact). But – just six weeks earlier – in a draft dated 6/16/86 – it was an entirely different movie. Sure, the concept of the “Dream Warriors” was there, so was the hospital and most of the patients. Even a couple of the kills are the same.

So what’s different? Let’s take a look. For instance, this draft of Dream Warriors gives us a look at “Baby Freddy”. A concept we don’t see explored until Part 5: The Dream Child is the very first thing we see here. Also, oddly, the script often spells “Freddy” as “Freddie”.

As you can see from the above page, this original draft also concerned itself with a wave of missing teens from across the nation.

One of the main differences here is that Nancy is the protagonist right off that bat, rather than Kristen (who doesn’t pop up until much later). The film originally opened in a dream of Nancy’s – wherein she stops to pick up a red-headed hitchhiker who makes multiple appearances in the draft.

One thing this draft isn’t short on? Interesting concepts. It’s also not short on iffy dialogue that would have been positively mangled by Langenkamp. Of course – it still has the jumprope sing-songy kids.

Nancy and her father. (whose dialogue in the script is alternately attributed to both “Father” and “John” – remember, these were the days when fixing errors like this meant typing a whole new page, not just conducting a find and replace), who has suddenly appeared, investigate a ranch house.

Then, she’s awoken from her dream by Neil – a stranger in this version. Her tire really is flat so he takes her to his place, the idea being that they’ll get her car in the morning. After the events of the first film you would think Nancy would be somewhat guarded about this kind of situation… but no.

Hypnocyl, the drug used in the final film, is also prevalent in this draft. Here, Neil researches it after taking an interest in Nancy – who is sleeping in the other room.

We dive into Nancy’s dream – where we meet our hitcher again. Here, the snake concept is used in a different manner. Neil via Freddy and Nancy instead of Kristen.

A big difference in this draft is that Neil invites Nancy to come check out the hospital. If you remember the finished film you’ll know that she was kind of foisted on him by the staff. Also – the idea of “an Elm Street in every town” is introduced. In the existing series it wouldn’t pop up until Freddy’s Dead: The Final Nightmare.

Turns out the dream hitchhiker was very real. A girl who “committed suicide”. Her hair is used as a recurring visual motif that haunts Nancy, a device that provides sufficient enough guilt to provide further motivation for her helping the kids.

Neil and Nancy head back to go get her car and stumble upon the crime scene. This road is, again, near the ranch house that keeps making a appearance…

… and Nancy’s car has actually been recovered from a nearby grain elevator, all slashed up by Freddy. A weird image.

Neil provides some exposition regarding the current “suicide storm”. I’m not sure if he means to say “county” or “country” since the opening images in the script are of large cities – which one would presume are from across the nation. He also makes mention of Kristen*, who was introduced earlier when admitted to the hospital (I didn’t include an image of this page – the scene plays out similarly to her admittance scene in the film, without the added benefit of being introduced to her dreams, her home life, or her mother yet).

*In this draft she’s “Kirsten”. I’m going to be calling her “Kristen” because that’s how we all know her from the film (and it’s how she was introduced in this piece).

Baby Freddy again. Here he swells into full form for the first time in the draft.

Neil tells Nancy about a “schizophrenic” who has tried to burn down the ranch house. We cut to the house – which clearly contains Freddy’s spirit (or whatever), subbing in thematically for the homemade replica Kristen made in the film.

The “schizophrenic” actually turns out to be Nancy’s father, John. He’s badly burned and hospitalized. In a huge change from the film, here he’s much more proactive. He hasn’t been hiding in a bottle, rather he’s been trying to hunt Freddy down all along. He actually kind of serves as an authority and expert on Freddy to Nancy throughout the script. It’s a far more organic role for his character when contrasted with his introduction in Act 3 of the finished film.

He explains the significance of the ranch house.

Phillip’s sleepwalking scene – minus the cool vein-marionette gag. Freddy’s physically walking him down the hall, with Phillip’s feet on top of his shoes.

In another big change – Kristen is actually discharged from the institution and heads back to high school, where she’s tormented by uber b*tch Sally…

… but it’s all good. Kristen gets some inadvertent revenge when she slips into a dream during class and wakes up, having ripped Sally’s clothes off in her nightmare.

John (here listed as both “Father” and “John” in the same scene) suggests to Nancy that Kristen and the other kids might be more powerful than she is, and that she’ll need their help taking down Freddy.

It should be noted that in this draft Kristen still has the power to pull people into her dreams, which will come in handy later.

Yay! Freddy Dog hunts Kincaid and Kristen in their dreams! I kind of wish we’d seen this.

A strange sex scene between Neil and Nancy. I’m pretty glad I didn’t have to watch this, it’s kind of awkward. And that line… just take a minute to imagine how goofy the below scene would have been on film. Wasson and Langenkamp getting it on would have been the most disturbing nightmare sequence in the entire series.

Nancy’s dad urging her to storm the ranch house with the Dream Warriors. While it’s cool that he’s more proactive in this draft, his scenes are repetitive and laden with exposition. I have a hunch they would have become seriously annoying in the film.

The Dream Warriors – including Laredo, a character omitted from the film – gather to storm the ranch house. Naturally this is all in a dream, and they’re all brought there by Kristen. I like the imagery of them gathered on the hilltop, preparing for battle.

Another difference is the presence of Joey. By this point in the final film he’s already tongue-tied to the bed. Here, he’s seduced and abducted during the 3rd act siege (instead of his “ransom” providing the catalyst for the 3rd act as it does in the film). In the 1986 draft, the tongues on the bed literally pull him apart, like four horses, killing him,

As in the final film, Nancy’s dad is brought into the 3rd act dream battle, but the mechanics of it are different. Also note – there’s no junkyard in this script. There’s also no Sister Mary Helena/Amanda Krueger. There’s no mention of her being locked away and there’s no mention of Freddy being the bastard son of a 100 maniacs.

Here, John seemingly dies.

Taryn is significantly different in this draft. For starters, she’s black. Her powers are different and so is her demise. Her grandmother (Freddy, naturally) opens up her stomach and eats her alive. Wes Craven’s handling of “urban dialogue” makes me uncomfortable sometimes.

Laredo, the Dream Warrior we never got to meet, turns into a gargoyle. This happens right after Freddy appeared to him as Toby, the little brother who drowned on Laredo’s watch (and whose memory still haunts him). Laredo’s wise to this though and kicks the little boy in the nuts, turning him into Freddy. After that happens the gargoyle bit comes into play. This sequence would have looked awesome. It makes little to no sense for someone to have gargoyle power though. In the finished film the kids’ dream abilities were to escape their real world damage, inadequacies and physical constraints. “Not being a gargoyle” isn’t exactly a real-life problem. Still, it’s a cool sequence (that was likely too expensive to film anyway).

Laredo is taken down by Freddy’s canny use of power tools. We can really see his penchant for one-liners taking shape in this draft. It’s an element that worked in this film, but pretty much destroyed the subsequent entries. The “screw you” here is something straight out of The Dream Master.

In another big change, Kincaid dies a fairly inventive, nasty death. Maddelena, by the way, is sort of this draft’s version of Priscilla Pointer’s Dr. Simms, only not as b*tchy.

John, Nancy and Kristen are transferred from the ranch house into the boiler room from the original film. Nancy instructs Kristen that the only way to take down Freddy is to turn your back on him and take away his power. Of course this is how things played out in the first film, and it’s an odd choice by Wagner and Craven because they spend a lot of time earlier in the script setting up the idea that the kids have a better way of destroying Freddy than Nancy does. It kind of comes out of nowhere.

Then, as it is in the final film, it turns out that Freddy is actually posing as John and he stabs Nancy in the stomach with his claw. The big change is that as she’s dying she plunges a steel blade into his chest – severely weakening him and making him melt/dissolve. Eventually he turns to ashes and blows away.

But he’s not dead yet… Kristen “wakes up” back at the ranch house. And, in the basement, we revisit the film’s opening scene depicting Freddy’s gruesome birth. Again, while Amanda Krueger (and her rape and pregnancy) are never mentioned – I suppose her uterus makes a cameo.

Here, Kristen kills Baby Freddy straight out of the womb.

Neil and Kristen are the only survivors. They awake together in a field covered by the ashes of the ranch house. Months later they’re having dinner together, and Neil reveals that Nancy still visits him in his dreams. It’s a sweet touch.

There you have it. All in all, Dream Warriors is probably my favorite of the Elm Street movies. However, I can’t help but wonder if I would have liked it better if this draft had been filmed. Both this script and the final film have their share of weaknesses, so it’s kind of a toss-up – with the final film winning by a hair I guess. Probably because it’s infinitely more focussed, as later drafts always are.

What do you think?

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Neon-Soaked Cult Classic ‘Vamp’ Starring Grace Jones Still Has Bite 40 Years Later

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Grace Jones and Dedee Pfeiffer in Vamp

College kids, strippers and vampires—those were Donald P. Borchers’ only requirements when he approached Richard Wenk about writing and directing a movie for New World Pictures. As requested, Wenk cooked up Vamp (1986), a tailor-made blend of the decade’s teen movie craze as well as its horror boom.

Grim and earnest stories were still very much a part of the ’80s horror landscape, yet Vamp is something of a comedy. One difference between it and, say, Saturday the 14th, though, is the former avoids using schtick. Wenk’s movie proves that horror comedies also don’t have to subtract thrills from their recipes. Of course, it takes a minute before reaching that point; college antics and culture shocks preface this one macabre misadventure.

Vamp‘s initial setup is apt for a typical college-set, sex-driven comedy; to bribe their way into a fraternity house, two pledges (Chris Makepeace, Robert Rusler) go looking for some adult entertainment. Without wasting time on any further exposition, the characters embark on an all-in-one-night trip that quickly detours into terror.

To procure their elusive MacGuffin—a stripper willing to gyrate for some frat boys—Keith (Makepeace) and AJ (Rusler), plus a third wheel named Duncan (Gedee Watanabe), trade the safety of their remote college campus for the seediness of some unnamed city. The setting is recognizably L.A. by day, but as soon as night falls, downtown, along with the characters, slips into a kind of surreal universe. Director of photography Elliot Davis gave this early entry on his prolific résumé an unusual yet distinctive look; that Mario Bava-esque, magenta-green lighting is omnipresent, so much so that it’s almost its own character. 

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Chris Makepeace and Robert Rusler in Vamp

The faint comparisons to Martin Scorsese’s After Hours are merited, although not just because of Vamp’s distinguishing nighttime aesthetic. Save for the primary characters, the supporting roles in Wenk’s movie are also quite colorful and transactional in their behavior. The difference here, though, is the additional urge to ruin Keith and his friends at every turn. Some of that harm is humorous and tolerable enough, whereas the moment Vamp dishes out its first fatality, it’s abundantly clear how this movie qualifies as horror.

Vamp falls into that category of horror movie that reveals its genre with a scream rather than a series of whispers. The opening scene can function as a hint of what lies ahead—things are not at all what they appear to be—but otherwise, Wenk is more than happy to hold off on the horror. When that time does come, though, it catches the viewer off guard. In addition to the pure shock value is that sudden decision to upend the movie’s foremost feature. Or so it would seem.

If afraid of major spoilage, those new to Vamp would be wise to stop reading here. There’s just no skirting around the fact that the central fellowship in this buddy movie hits a serious snag when AJ is killed. That development causes the story to become more of a “long, bad night” journey for Keith and his romantic interest. So while Wenk scores points for subverting expectations, there is also a touch of sadness in his decision. Because if Vamp does anything well, it’s making the characters likable.

Something that comes easily to Vamp—and other teen horror movies from this same era—is its ability to invent young characters worth caring about, or at the very least, are interesting and not so immediately off-putting. More impressive is how Wenk did all this without actually fleshing out those characters. Still and all, Keith and his kind are a grade above cookie-cutter, and in some cases, aren’t completely devoid of growth.

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Grace Jones in Vamp

Vamp appeals with an assorted cast of characters. No two are the same, nor are they operating on the same wavelength. The cinematically extroverted AJ, whose actor conveyed charm and vulnerability in near equal amounts, comes alive when he’s at his most undead. Makepeace then makes the chronically cautious Keith a sympathetic fellow, even as he’s more and more affected by the night’s bizarre events. Meanwhile, Duncan is indeed the designated loser of the whole bunch, but Watanabe still manages to humanize him. As a bonus, the role didn’t require him to pull a Long Duk Dong.

As for Dedee Pfeiffer, she is plain adorable as the mysterious After Dark server nicknamed “Amaretto”. She spends all night fixing her dress strap while at the same time trying to get Keith to remember how he knows her. As their offbeat romance grows, it becomes another highlight of this movie. Whether or not Pfeiffer’s character is really a vampire also creates some welcome tension in the story.

Like a lot of its contemporaries, Vamp went on to become a bit of a cult classic. That current status is determined by several factors, but without a doubt, the casting of Grace Jones is the most considerable. The image of her writhing on that unique-looking chair, a Keith Haring original, springs to mind whenever this movie is brought up.

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Chris Makepeace, Billy Drago and Paunita Nichols in Vamp

Prior to that first display of unequivocal horror, local vampire queen Katrina (Jones) took to the stage and delivered a strip show like no other. One would expect nothing less from that renowned model and performance artist. By now reports of Jones’ tardiness on set are no secret, yet it’s also hard to deny her commitment to the part of Katrina. It was, in fact, Jones who took charge of her character’s appearance—on top of Haring painting her body and that now-iconic chair, she had Andy Warhol handle her costuming. And not too many actors could seize a room’s attention without saying a single line of dialogue.

In 2022, Vamp received a retrospective novelization from Encyclopocalypse. This literary union of preexisting source material—Wenk’s original screenplay—and new ideas from author Christian Francis amounts to a more comprehensive visit to the After Dark Club. The basic story there is no different than what’s shown on screen; however, Francis gets creative with the characters’ origins and designs, and he enhances a number of key scenes.

The novelization expands on the urban and social decay of the main setting, and supplies a background for the After Dark Club. Sandy Baron’s character, Katrina’s emcee and familiar, is given ample motivation for sticking around; up until the fiery end, he is loyal to his friend and former business partnerSqueak, who looks like he wasfed through a combine harvester, and left as nothing more than a heap of mangled remains. Then there is Billy Drago’s character Snow, the leader of a street gang called The Dragons. His reason for menacing Keith and AJ is more altruistic than in the movie; he and his peers act tough to scare off any potential food for the vampires. 

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Lisa Lyon in Vamp

If not for all the backstories, Francis’ Vamp would be a hell of a lot shorter. Instead, this tie-in read dives into how AJ met Keith—the orphaned Anthony Joseph hailed from a broken home back in Brooklyn—and how their friendship flourished over the years. Keith’s archership is no longer just an assumed part of his entire being; it’s a confidence-building extracurricular for a boy who got picked on before coming into the protection of the new kid in town. These supplemental, in-depth looks at the protagonists, plus their close connection, are maybe unnecessary. The movie already did a fair and concise job of addressing their platonic intimacy without the need for flashbacks and insights, specifically in that scene where AJ lays it all out as he sacrifices himself.

Where the novelization gets off course is its approach to the minor characters. Intermittently backstorying the likes of Katrina’s indentured servants, Seko (Leila Hee Olsen) and Vlad (Brad Logan), ends up disturbing the flow of the writing. Was it absolutely essential that readers know Vlad was the Grand Duke of the House of Romanov, or how Snow’s accomplice Maven (Paunita Nichols) became so dentally challenged? No, not really. However, one’s mileage with these random biographies may vary.

The novelization is a more substantial experience, but for a movie like Vamp, less is more. And as plentiful as they are, it never simply coasts on its campy charms, either. The character work sits comfortably in that realm between cursory and meticulous, the script is sharper than first realized, and Greg Cannom’s vampire makeup is straightforward yet effective. Most of all, the movie didn’t squander its out-of-the-box concept. Richard Wenk made his vision of acomic nightmare in which just about anything that can go wrong doescome true, and it is very enjoyable.

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